Sunday, April 29, 2018

April Poetry Challege Winners - Wildflowers








Nancy Jesse, a Wisconsin writer, judged the April Poetry Challenge, on the theme of wildflowers. Here are the two winning poems, along with the judge’s comments on them.

Trilliums

When snow melts
in the deepest shadows
of our Wisconsin woods,
white of wild trilliums
takes its place.
Though my father understood
the state has claimed them
as their own
and threatens fines
for anyone who argues,
he dared every May
to walk the south forty,
surprising
his sweetheart
with a large bouquet
of spring
offered in his wide
calloused hand.

~ Peggy Trojan

First published in Rav'n

The judge wrote, “A beautiful tribute to a father now gone, "Trilliums” celebrates the miracle of spring as it rises, in the form of masses of white wildflowers, from the “deepest shadows” of snow and winter. The short lines echo the stem of the trilliums. The line breaks emphasizing the slow revelation of “showing” details about the man who defied the state in order to surprise “his  sweetheart” (I hope the speaker’s mother— but if not, that introduces an element of intrigue). This effective use of line, careful choice of cogent details, and gentle alliteration create a loving portrayal of place and people.”

NOTE: Since 1978, trillium are no longer protected by law if they are on your private land; before that you could be fined or jailed for picking them on your own property.

SECOND NOTE: I learned from reading this poem—and checking a couple of dictionaries—that the plural of “trillium” can be either “trillium” or “trilliums.”



Wild Flower

His greatest desire
was to slow the bloom.

The heart of that hope
lay with the lingering chill,
the tardy arrival of spring.

Improbable
that the blossom should open
early; he wasn’t prepared.

Sporting his woolen shirt,
from the porch he watched
the new shoot bend and wave
in the chilly, hillside breeze.

If only time would hold still.

Then there was the knock
on the door, the deputy sheriff
talking gravely about the boy,
the young girl, in the speeding car
that crashed on the sharp bend
of the old River Road.

“No!” he answered, “Not mine!”
He cried out—leading the officer
up the stairs to the room
where his flower slept.

There,
the open window,
the lace curtains waving in the cold.

~ Judy Galati

The judge said, “This narrative poem shows a complex interweaving of the metaphoric and literal; the somewhat ambiguous ending proves mysterious, intriguing, and haunting. The unnamed man in the opening seems to be cultivating a flower, but the abrupt turn in stanza six points a reader toward interpreting the flower as a “young girl,” probably the man's daughter, whom he’d hoped to keep from growing up so quickly into a woman (“If only time would hold still”). I am not sure if the young girl, as well as the boy, have died in the end. . . . There’s a surreal quality in this ending; perhaps the flower was planted in remembrance of the girl, and its blooming re-creates her death announcement in the memory of the man.

“This poem shows fine writing — alliteration, extended metaphor, effective line breaks, skillful manipulation of diction, time, tone and mood, powerful imagery.


Congratulations to these two fine poets!


Bios:

Judy Galati (nee Kilby), formerly Judy DePauw, grew up in the Blue Ridge Mountains of Virginia. She graduated magna cum laude from Northern, with a major in English and a minor in linguistics. Judy Galati is a published poet who has received a variety of writing awards in local, state, national, and international competition. Beyond holding membership in the Illinois State Poetry Society, and the National Federation of State Poetry Societies, Inc., she is an active member of Lemont Writers.

Peggy Trojan lives in the north woods of Wisconsin, and enjoys many different kinds of spring wild flowers; trilliums, violets, forget-me-nots, cowslips, columbine and others. Retired from teaching English, she published her first poem when she was seventy-seven. She has published one full collection, Essence, and three chapbooks of poetry, Everyday Love, Homefront, Childhood Memories of WWII, and Free Range Kids, which recently won a first in the Helen Kay chapbook award. She is a member of the Wisconsin Fellowship of Poetry.

Nancy Jesse has won the Wisconsin Writers’ Association’s Jade Ring contest in three categories: Poetry, Fiction, and Nonfiction. She taught English at West High School in Madison, Wisconsin, and is popular leader at conferences for writers. She has been published in a number of journals including Midwest Review, Wisconsin People and Ideas, and Verse Wisconsin. She is a member of the Wisconsin Fellowship of Poets.